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1Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Mon Sep 16, 2013 8:28 am

Wei

Wei
Kiri Genin
Kiri Genin



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"...You're existence is futile."

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Name: Wei Zhun
Nickname:
Blonde Arrow -> Wei attains the nickname because of the color of his hair and his addiction to blades and arrow guns of all sizes.
Age: Fifteen
Gender: Male
Village: Kirigakure
Village Rank: Genin
Skill Rank: D

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Height:
5 foot and 6 inches
Weight: 130 pounds
Hair color: Blonde
Eye Color: Blue.
Looks Image:
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Looks Description:
- Wei holds himself as a tall, extremely handsome Shinobi who is also most inexplicably elegant and youthful looking (catching eyes of everyone, especially females). He is characterized as having a narrow jaw-line; while his nose is small as the tip is small and round, the bridge of his nose, narrow. His upper and lower lip is small also. His eye pupils shows the personality that he has of being relaxed and yet lazy because of the fact that his eyes looks as if he is half asleep. Both eyes consisted of his normal eyes, sapphire-blue, as they appeared to change to the color of a more darker blue when he is consumed by rage. As for his hair, he wears his hair with a dirty blonde color as long with two strands of hair in front of his face, having the length of his hair become past shoulder-length.

- Wei's body is known as somewhat of sheer perfection: muscle-toned with great features, cut and well built. People could tell that Wei had been working out all of his life, but truthfully, he had not lifted a single weight. He described his body features as somewhat, "natural." Others do not really believe what he was saying, but he knew best about his body. He keeps his body healthy at all times, doing exercises, taking long walks and even gets a workout when fighting shinobi from different villages. He claims that his body is "indestructible" because no one can break his body. He usually lets people think so when the real purpose of saying that is because he doesn't really fight that much. He figured that it would dirty his body of his opponent's blood.

- Wei classifies himself as a studious and a good-looking person in heart. With that said, his usual color of his attire would usually be around the color of a abyssal black color with a darkish-grey color with a hint of dark red to emphasize his personality as being powerful in his actions while taking his studies past his limit. His personal favorite are the full body suits of all aspects.

- The color of Wei's full body suit is only the color black. The full body suit is simply a single form-fitting piece of clothing that covers everything except the feet, hands, and head (although the ones used by the ANBU reveal the arms from shoulder down). It seems that it would allow stealthly movements, and the ones worn by Wei allows full movement, retain moisture, and is breathable. He wears the Morningstar-colored (Camoflauge (black and blue and white)) flak jacket over his full body suit, portraying the Morningstar crest of the back of his Flak Jacket. He keeps the zipper of his Flak Jacket closed.

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Personality Description:
- Wei is a very cheerful and loyal person, especially toward his higher authorities, but can become quite serious and calculative when the situation calls for it. Although Wei has shown a sadistic side during his recurrent battles, he is also compassionate towards human beings, especially towards his own allies. When he became a Genin for Kirigakure along with the others, he shows enmity and hostility toward other village shinobi and his enemies while displaying compassion and empathy for the humans and his fellow shinobi.

- He is seen on multiple occasions to be extremely organized and thus, he loathes messiness (especially in his house) almost to the point of obsession. He has been noted to be reckless, exceedingly dangerous, and bloodthirsty when he uses too much of his power.

- When he fights, being a philosopher, he usually calculates his enemies and surveys his surroundings, trying to decipher a pattern on how to use the field to his advantage to an easy. This is contributed as to Wei letting his opponent choosing the first move. Wei looks at specific body parts to pinpoint the movement of his opponents: the shoulders, the thighs, and the hips. Wei thinks that everyone that fights as an attack pattern. He states that following that attack pattern and utilizing it to your advantage can ensure you into an easy win. But, even doing that might get him to his downfall because people can switch up their attack pattern at any time to confuse his/her opponent.
Likes:
- peace and quiet; to be away from everything and everyone. He feels that silence is golden and wishes that mostly everyone would just be quiet.
- training; he knows that hard work pays off greatly. He is usually seen outside working on his techniques or trying to think of some new techs along the way.
- reading; he said that mostly romance and inspirational novels are the best books to read, said it soothes his mind altogether.
- writing; claimed that French was his favorite language in high school.
- food; he mostly prefers tomatoes, dumplings, and preferably spicy food in the process.
- fighting; Wei also enjoys fighting, shown when he sometimes doesn't fight at his full potential so he can toy with his opponent or make a fight last longer.
- family; Wei values family and friends very highly. He cared deeply for his mother and, despite their differences, he also cared for Nataki.
Dislikes:
- cocky people; Cocky people. Wei doesn't like cocky people. He knows that everyone is different in their own way, but don't flaunt about how perfect you are or how strong you are then do not have the adequate strength to back up what you are saying.
- weak people; Wei dislikes weaklings. Being that he is nonchalant but nonetheless dedicated to his training, he trains himself to know that only the strongest will survive, to when it is called 'Survival of the Fittest'.
- lazy; being the more active, diligent shinobi, meaning being very studious and hardworking, Wei has a huge dislike toward lazy people or people who stay in one place and literally do nothing.
- cold food; Wei prefers his food hot, such as why he does not eat cereal for breakfast.
- winning a fight in an illegitimate manner, cheating to get one's way and brag about it
- smart-mouth people, disrespectful people, fortune tellers, people with absolutely little to no manners at all
Catch Phrases:
- "You saw it coming, didn't you?"
- "Brains or brawns? Heh... I have both."
- "You cannot stand to achieve greatness... especially my enlightenment."
Nindo:
- "...I came into this world for one objective: to protect those who are weak. My job is never complete until evil exists no more."

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Element Affinity: None
Sub Element Affinity:

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History:
- "I'm surprised you would want to hear about my life story..."

- ACADEMY - GENIN YEARS

Wei was born in a small, humid village in Kirigakure, a land that had suffered from war not long before. Wei's mother and father were harvesters, poor harvesters to be exact, but they tried as hard as they can to get anything for their son. Being an only child, Wei's mother and father spoiled him, and yet although he was appreciative, the stuff did not matter. The family loved each other for who they are, despite the little arguments that Wei's father and mother had. They would usually venture around different villages because of the weather.

Until one day, at the age of 12, he went on a trip with his mother to visit his grandfather on the other side of the village, the Morningstar village. There, his grandfather told him the history of the Morningstar clan, and that his mother was a ninja of the same clan himself. Although the clan itself had no Kekkai Genkai, they were the more brutal clan between the Uzumaki and the Senju clan. One day, through the training of Wei's mother, father, and grandfather (father from his mother's side), Wei had begun training in the arts of weaponry.

Training for 5 days and 6 nights (skipped morning training and moved it to evening - night), Wei's natural velocity and dexterity increased. On the sixth and final day, Wei's mother and grandfather granted him with his very own Morningstar flak jacket.

He started his training on July 18th. It took 5 months to train weaponry, and Wei was a fast learner. On October 17th, two days before his 13th birthday, he finally trained weaponry and mixing it with Taijutsu had made him the physical mastermind. But one day, October 18th, his father and grandfather got into an argument about Wei's mother on how she was weak at heart and at strength because she retired as a ninja. That caused Wei's father to duel with several ninja of the same clan.

Wei's father was a Taijutsu user himself, but he more so lead along the lines of Fuuinjutsu and even Medical Ninjutsu, leaning more towards Medical Nin  as an offensive style while still generally himself, combining Medical Nin and Fuuinjutsu together. Although Wei's father was not exceptionally good in Weaponry, his natural speed and agility along with his vast knowledge of Taijutsu had made up for it, for his mother was apart of the Morningstar clan as well, but lived in another village. Wei's father wasn't remorse at heart, fatally killing the ninja that came in his way. Wei saw everything in the shadows. Wei's father, with emotions of rage and anger, killed his clan's brethren and aimed for his grandfather.

On October 19th, when Wei turned thirteen, Wei's grandfather and father fought for hours, during the afternoon to the evening but in the end, at sun fall to night rise, Wei's father slayed his mother's father in cold blood. Wei had tears in his eyes as he was now ashamed to look at his father and ran away from the man that he loved.

Wei went back to his mother and told the news about the slaughter, did not notice that someone overheard their conversation and immediately reported to the Kirikage. Wei and his mother stayed at their home and waited.

2 weeks have passed and no sign of Wei's father. Wei stayed in his room sleep while his mother went to go buy some food for the house. In the streets of Kiri there were talks of a man killing his own clan out of anger from his father. Wei's mother overheard the conversation as she walked past but stayed quiet. There were also rumors that the Mizukage banished the man from ever entering the village. Now, Wei's mother was upset and gasped in horror. Dropping her groceries, she ran back to her home, woke up Wei, and told him the news.

That night... Wei... cried for a week, never leaving his room, not even to go eat, or play with his friends.

Finishing the academy at the top of his class, he felt no remorse for his father, but thinking that his father disliked, no hated, the village he lived in, he also thought that his father hated him too. And the only way to deal with that hatred, was by hating back.

Now a Genin ongoing to be a Chunnin, Wei wished to carry out his clan's legacy and be the best Morningstar ninja there was, yet seeking revenge on his father for slaughtering his very own clan out of anger.

RP Sample: Same RP Sample as my main character, Aigo Nabada.



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2Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Mon Sep 16, 2013 9:26 am

Wei

Wei
Kiri Genin
Kiri Genin

Kenjutsu:
Taijutsu:



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3Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Mon Sep 16, 2013 9:32 am

Wei

Wei
Kiri Genin
Kiri Genin

Completed. My apologies for double posting.

4Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Tue Sep 17, 2013 1:06 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

For an original character, you shouldn't make an appearance to match a picture - you should find a picture to match your appearance. A shinobi wearing dress clothing is not only out of the time period, but also very inefficient. He'd very quickly find that dress shirts and ties and whatnot are very, very impractical - moving flexibly would be incredibly hard, keep that in mind. (I.E: he wouldn't be doing acrobatics in a tuxedo)

'Vans' and 'Converse' shoes do not exist in the Naruto world, they are out of the time period.

I have a hard time believing that someone who considers himself to be a businessman, and is neatly organized, would also have a burning rage. Especially a village Jonin, who is apparently 'compassionate' towards other humans. A little contradictory, hm?

3 S-Rank Weapons? I don't think so, sorry. I would only allow one S-Rank sword to a Jonin with weapon-specialist, having any more could cause a lot of problems. As well, weapons are heavy - carrying three on his person would weigh him down considerably, on top of his already-constricting attire.

But looking at each one specifically:

KATANA OF INJUSTICE:

- The Wind is way too powerful. Enhancing the sword with wind chakra is a separate technique altogether, but with a five-foot bonus, you have a seven-foot sword. That's larger than Kubikiribocho or Samehada, which are only about 5-6 feet in length. As well, being surrounded by a 'gale of wind' has absolutely nothing to do with the sword itself, and should instead be removed and remade into its own Jutsu. However, it is still way too powerful. First of all, throwing away ninja of S-Rank or lower is saying that it can throw away absolutely everyone, including other Jonin, Sanin, and Kage. For a Jonin, that is a great big 'no'. Lower that to B-Rank, if you choose to make it into a technique. Same with projectile deflection, lower it to deflecting C-Rank or lower techniques if you separate it into its own technique. (Also, having an ability that blows enemies away while wielding a sword is pretty bad, since you'd never get close enough to use the blade to begin with)

- The Lightning is completely unnecessary. Just like The Wind, it works much better as its own technique than something slapped onto a sword to make it S-Rank. Paralyzing shinobi of S-Rank or lower is still too much, make it C-Rank or lower as I'm sure there are Chunin shinobi who could withstand it as well.

- "Security" Remove it entirely. In-animate objects cannot generate their own chakra, and the ability makes little sense, as 'wind blades' wouldn't be able to infiltrate the body where there is no actual 'wind' (air, but not blowing wind) to sustain them. While electricity makes more sense, there is still no reason for the sword to have that ability.

- "In-Tune" Another definite no-go. You cannot merely be able to break out of any genjutsu, just because your weapon can inexplicably 'feel' it, that would give you too much of an advantage over Genjutsu users.

All in all, this sword is way too powerful for me to want to pass at all.

SWORD OF LIGHT: RESHO NUM:

Let me just say that 'he happened to buy it on the market!' is not a good enough back-story for a blade that is 'sentient' as well as S-Ranked. Please, don't cop-out and just say 'It's a mystery!', Out of Character, we NEED to know this information.

- Living Just how 'alive' are we talking here? Can it move around on its own like Samehada? Does it make noises? What happens when someone else touches the blade?

More importantly, why is Wei able to wield it if it probably had a different wielder before himself? Please note that making the blade too much like Samehada is not what I'm asking.

- Lighslayer This is also very vague. What is 'Nature' chakra? How does it suppress chakra? How does it have that power? What do you mean by 'suppressing' chakra? What do you mean by 'repelling' chakra? How does it being 'sentient' allow it to completely ignore Wei's own chakra? This ability also sounds like something that doesn't need to be a weapon, and would work better as a Jutsu, maybe.

The Hidden Blades are fine, but they don't seem like they're B-Rank. Make them C-Rank, instead. Also, this is pretty obviously taken from Assassin's Creed.

CHAINS OF GLEIPNIR:

- Nothing is indestructible or unbreakable. While it can be hard to break, please change this. (and none of that 'S-Rank or lower' stuff, as it's essentially the same thing)

- The weight manipulation is a pretty cool thing, but it needs to have a limit. Also, making something like that weigh too much would make it impossible for him to use normally, and would also be a great strain on his body/chakra, even with enhanced strength.

- Wei cannot have 2 of them.

- Greek Mythology does not exist in the Naruto universe. Once again, cool concept, but it doesn't fit very well. Also, 'I just found it!' is still not a very good explaination.

Wei is carrying a lot of extra weapons on top of his ubersuperpowerful S-Ranks, might want to cut them down a bit.

As for Wei's history, you're going to need a lot more than what you have right now. Please add on at least two more paragraphs, and remember to space your paragraphs out.

I am not very fond of the 'child prodigy' tale, either. It isn't mandatory, but perhaps you can come up with something else? There's already been countless stories like that. Graduating at age nine instead of age 10-13 is a little far-fetched.

That whole story about the boar is really unnecessary, and seems more like filler. It didn't impact his history over-all, and should probably be removed.

There is no way that Wei would've made it into the ANBU without being at least a Chunin.

In fact, there is nothing in his history that currently makes Wei a Jounin rank...?

There's nothing in his history mentioning how he got his weapons either, but I don't think you'll be keeping all of those S-ranks anyway.

JUTSU:


Air Pressure Annihilation is way too powerful to be a C-Rank technique. The normal Wind Blade Jutsu is an A-Rank, meaning that this would either be an S-Rank, which he could not learn, or an A-Rank with a high Chakra cost.

Saber Aerial Assault is also a little too powerful, and I don't think it's needed at all. On another note, 'Sharpness' does not affect the cutting potential of a blade. You could sharpen a sword all you want, but it won't ever cut through concrete on its own. Because this really isn't that much of a bonus, I don't think you really need to have it, considering the strength of Connection 1.

Blazing Touch is... odd. I don't quite understand what it is, the way you worded it was a little confusing. But from what I understand, it's essentially just Connection 1 with Lightning element chakra, yes? This would not enhance its 'Sharpness' (Which, once again, has nothing to do with cutting power) and it would still have to be bumped up to an A-Rank, with an increase in chakra consumption as well.

Tornado Whirlwind needs a Chakra cost, but also needs to be nerfed a bit. Remember that no ability is an instant-hit, and by turning his back to the enemy they have a very high chance of avoiding damage. I'd also bump this up to S-Rank.

Fervent Blow also needs a chakra cost and needs to be boosted up to at least A-Rank.

Reaper is the same deal. Needs chakra and a rank boost.

It should be noted that you cannot have too many S-Rank abilities/weapons, and you may have to sacrifice some of these techniques.

I see someone's a Star Wars fan. But so am I. Before I get into the 'Ataru' stuff, let me make it clear that a lightsaber and a Katana are not the same, and the styles do not translate over. Because a Lightsaber is completely weightless, Jedi can jump when they attack with little to no resistance. This does not apply to an actual Katana, so please note that Wei may not end up quite as fast as you think he is.

V-Formation should be a B-Rank, or C-Rank but dramatically slower. D-Rank techniques should not have the capable to severely damage an enemy in any way.

Rising Moon should be moved up to a C-Rank.

Rapid Succession needs more explanation, as well as a Chakra cost. Why does it leave a 'trail of slashes' behind him? The only possible explanation would be Jutsu, and so it needs to have a chakra cost.

Sudden Oblivion is way too powerful. Your best bet is to scrap it, as the speed at which Wei would have to move to actually preform this would put him on-par with a Kage, when he's only a Jounin. As well, it is almost god-modding, as it is assuming that Wei would be able to preform all of these attacks without resistance.

Lunar Eclipse should be bumped up to an A-Rank, as it's nearly more powerful than Sudden Oblivion. But there is a part that needs more explaining. How can he make somersaulting slash 'attempts' if he's sheathed his blade? I know you want Wei to be like Vergil, but this makes no sense.

Transience needs to be bumped to a C-Rank. As for knocking enemies away seven feet, assuming that it will always be seven feet is underestimating your enemies. Lower this to about 3-4 feet for ninja of Chunin rank or higher, and don't expect it to do much against a Kage/Anbu Captain.

Fear Cosmic Slashing Touch sounds like a joke, honestly. There is no explanation for its power other than assuming that your character is more determined than absolutely everyone else'. There can be no instant-killing techniques. Remove it, or find a legitimate way to explain its power - a simple sword slash would not be able to slice a building in two and move faster than the wind without something backing it up. No matter what. As well, this wouldn't really be an S-Rank technique. When brought into actuality, it would probably only be a B-Rank tech. This would also require a Chakra Cost. But your best bet would be to get rid of it.

Qual should also be removed. It is borderline god-modding, as it is assuming that any character it will be used on will have that effect.

High-Rate Bullets is in the same boat. A technique with rapid kicks is okay, but the way that the technique specifies it makes it seem like it is always sure to happen, and there is nothing that can be done to stop it.

Purifier makes little sense. Why does the Kanji appear, if Wei doesn't actually have Katon as a chakra element? Once again, it is still borderline god-mod with the combo.

Truth Tornado needs a Chakra cost. Also, Wei doesn't have Fire chakra, which makes this very confusing.

Dragon Tail is the only one here that sounds like a legitimate Taijutsu.

Couple things to keep in mind:

- TAIJUTSU COST CHAKRA TOO! Your chakra is the energy you use to move around, not just the energy used for Jutsu. That means that Taijutsu, too, cost Chakra.

- Taijutsu are NOT long strings of attacks. You cannot throw an enemy over your shoulder and punch him five times and then kick him six times and then throw him back over your shoulder. That is not a Taijutsu. Look at the canon Taijutsu: Most of it, with Rock Lee as a great example, are single, swift, and practical. The stuff you have here is complicated, too in-depth, and much of it completely unnecessary/unfit for most of the environments it'll be used in.

- Cut back on your details. You won't see me type this often, but things like '180 degree turns' and a precise amount of damage possibilities are very limiting, and Role Playing is very free.

I'll take a look again once Wei is updated.

5Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Tue Sep 17, 2013 5:06 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

This I'm going to have fun with.

First, seeing as though Frankenstein from Nobelesse is my character's face claim, that really kinda beats the first paragraph of what you just said. Now, I can change the typing of his appearance to something a little more on the ninja side, but if I'm using a face claim, I'm sticking to their appearance.

I can change Vans and Converse to Ninja shoes in which I have no problem with.

He keeps his personality unpredictable. Not all Jounin can be compassionate without a little dark side in them. You have some Jounin's that are not even compassionate at all. Again, kinda beats your paragraph.

Since you said you can allow only one S-rank sword, that beats your paragraph of even describing the problems of my swords, since I can only have one, in which I'll keep Katana of Injustice.

But, you want to review my swords, and I'll be happy to answer.

KATANA OF INJUSTICE:

- The Wind is simply revolving the use of channeling wind-natured chakra onto the sword, increasing its cutting power and usage of other small abilities. The sword is being surrounded by 'a gale of wind'... wouldn't that be by the user channeling that same wind-natured chakra onto the sword? I can lower S-rank and make it into B-rank because Wei is of a much higher rank, but not making into a jutsu. I'll lower the deflection to C-rank, but not making it a jutsu technique.

- The Lightning can paralyze the opponent of B-rank or lower by 50% and A-rank by 25%. That's why there are percentages because there are some Chunin shinobi that can withstand the paralysis.

- Security... If the material is part of something that his chakra-related or if the user imbues his own chakra in the sword, pretty sure that same in-animate object can generate that chakra. The little 'wind blades' can actually come from the user's wind-natured chakra, imbuing that in the blade itself.

- In-Tune... While the user imbues his own chakra in the blade, the sword, just like Resho Num, can be living as well, feeling the chakra of his owner which enables the sword to break out of Genjutsu of B-rank or lower.

Now that's out the way...

SWORD OF LIGHT: RESHO NUM

I was just having a little fun with the origin. I'll change it.

- Living 'Alive' enough to know that the wielder's chakra is different than any other chakra that tries to touch the blade. Although it doesn't move around like Samehada, it does create a pulse-like sound whenever someone tries to touch the blade, for they cannot touch the blade unless they are ordered to specifically by Wei.

I think this blade would be far different than Samehada as this blade was not stolen by another shinobi, but rather passed down from the Morningstar Clan, who all share equally the same chakra, which explains nearly the same clan but a different user can wield this blade.

- Lightslayer Nature chakra as in since the blade itself is sentiment, the blade has its own chakra, unlike Katana of Injustice. How does it supress chakra? Simple, it crushes the chakra of those that are not the Morningstar, Uzumaki, or the Senju clan by rank. Since the sword itself is S-rank, if the user is not of the Morningstar clan, you can say it slowly drains away the chakra of those that tries to wield the sword itself. The sword itself was made from a special metal and had a seal put on it by the Uzumaki clan to grant that ability. Repelling chakra... it forces the chakra of the non-Morningstar, Uzumaki, or Senju clansmen away from the sword. You have to cancel one to do the other, for both cannot be used at the same time. Since the sword is sentient, it's very familiar and very compatible with Wei's chakra because of the clan that he is in.

The Hidden Blades will be C-rank since Guns are not allowed on this site.

CHAINS OF GLEIPNIR

Unless broken by other diamonds, diamond is indestructible. If the weapon is created by using a far more sturdier material that is very hard to break unless broken by that same material, it is indestructible.

If the weight manipulation needs a limit, then please fill me in.

He'll only have 1.

Just telling the original history of the chains, since its something you can't really put in detail when referred to ninjas and whatnot. How Wei found it, is another story. I was just giving the short version.

He'll cut down on the Senbon, no Kunai, Wireless Radio is fine, and cutting down on the explosive tags.

As for my history, I'm pretty sure there are histories on this site that are shorter than mines. But, alright, I'll add two more paragraphs.

His father had pushed him past his expectations, past his limits. Of course, some prodigies are born, not made.

Fillers are something I'm used to since it actually does tell his background and history of that character.

If I can recall: age, gender, background, or rank bear no weight in the decision of becoming an anbu. As he got older, there was a point in time where he did increase in rank.

I'll put in the history on how he got one of the swords, but wouldn't that already be in the origin of the weapon itself? Kinda saying the same thing if you ask me.

JUSTU

...How is Connection 1 too powerful? It's just like Sesshomaru's little whip, but made of wind-release chakra that increases the cutting power and range of the technique, especially the blade. A-rank would be a little too much, more so B-rank at the most.

Connection 2 is the advanced version of Connection 1. Again, it increases the cutting power and range of the technique, especially the blade. This is Chakra Flow we are discussing, think I know what I mean by such. I'll put this at A-rank or S-rank, mostly A-rank.

Blazing Touch is basically enhancing the technique's numbness and more so piercing power through vibrations, my apologies for wording that wrong.

Tornado Whirlwind... I'll bump it to S-rank. But with the equivalent speed and precision of the attack, I'm pretty sure a technique like Tornado Whirlwind would be difficult to dodge unless you have a real good strategy of dodging such.

Fervent Blow will be edited.

Reaper will be edited.

Majority of the techniques are really not S-rank at all, I'm only counting two at the most. One blade and one chain is all the S-rank weapons I need.

I think you are forgetting the two Hidden Blades that Wei has in addition to his Ataru style.

V formation is simply is only two slashes, that isn't really severe at all in any case. But, I'll let it go to B-rank.

Rising Moon will be edited.

Sudden Oblivion will go to B-rank with scrap speed, although I don't really know how it is god-modding since the combo is continuous.

Lunar Eclipse will go to A-rank. And again, you are forgetting the Hidden Blades Wei has on his left and right hand.

Transcience will be edited.

Fear Cosmic Slash... with enough force of the swing of the sword and depending on the cutting power (if or if not enhanced) along with the precision of the blade, a lot can happen with one simple swing.

Qual... is not even god-modding. It's just a series of kicks that are brutal.

High-Rate Bullets is not even close to god-modding. It would be god-modding if I did that it is used with succession, meaning never miss. But we are talking at close-distance...

The Kanji can appear with concentrated air that is ignited and then flames are created. Again, I don't see how god-modding when you're grabbing your opponent by the face, smashes it on the ground, and punching the chest. Have to think about the force behind the punch and whatnot...

Truth Tornado will be switched from Fire Chakra to Wind Chakra or Lightning Chakra.

How can Taijutsu cost chakra when it is more so a physical skill? I think Taijutsu is more so around Physical energy unless enhanced with Chakra Flow, then we are on the same page. "It typically does not require chakra, though chakra may be used to enhance its techniques." Got from the Narutowikia page.

You can make combos off of certain techniques. Dragon Tail is not a string, but it can be used as one. Look at Sasuke's Lion Combo, a string of attacks.

I like to keep my things limited. I'm the more detailed type of person. My apologies for roleplaying that way.

That was a good review. Thanks Tsugeki. I'll get to editing right away.

6Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Tue Sep 17, 2013 6:35 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

Drop the attitude. It won't get your character accepted any faster.

Having a face-claim doesn't 'beat my first paragraph'. You may be taking the character's image, but you have to apply that character to a Naruto setting. You wouldn't really be playing them in a Naruto world, but your character would have the same general looks. I still stand by the fact that wearing dress clothing is not the ideal attire of a Shinobi. You aren't obligated to change it, but it is something to keep in mind.

Being compassionate and respectful but also rampaging-angry -is- a contradiction, not just way to mix things up.

I reviewed all the weapons to show you what they would have to have fixed, depending one which one you wanted to keep. It was up to you to pick the sword.

Replies:

- The Wind: In order to use the wind ability, Wei has to use his chakra. This is not an innate ability of the sword itself. It could be used by many other different Fuuton users on many other different swords - there's nothing about this one that makes this weapon-specific, which is why it would work better as a technique. On top of this, making it into a technique would get you more uses out of the ability.

- The Lightning: This is fine now, but I still say that it would work better as a technique.

- Security: In-animate objects can not generate chakra. Period. What you're describing is a trap placed by a shinobi on the blade, springing when someone else touched it. The flaw with this is that it, once again, would be a technique, although there would be something on the blade to allow it to work. As well, because he would have to put his own chakra into it, it would not be an automatic thing that happened absolutely all the time. He would have to replace that chakra every time that trap was sprung. Once again, this leads it to be more of a means for using a technique than the ability of the sword itself.

- In-Tune: I am still very much on the edge about this. It is essentially allowing you to detect Genjutsu, but not all genjutsu affect the chakra system in a notable way, and not all of them can be stopped with just pain. However, having a limit of B-Rank Genjutsu, I will allow it. But, if another mod thinks it is too much, they can certainly deny it if they'd like.

OVERALL: Many of the abilities of the blade would be better off as techniques on their own. But, now that the other abilities have been clarified, that isn't necessary. Other staff may put their own input on the matter.

I won't go over the other S-Ranks since you've decided on the Katana.

BUT, nothing can be indestructible on the site. That is not up for discussion. Diamond is a very special case, but it can actually be broken very easily. I don't know the scientific facts myself, but I know that if hit at the right location with just enough force, Diamond is as brittle as glass.

There might have been shorter histories, but you are applying for an A-Rank shinobi and should provide as such. Don't point the finger at other people - I am looking at your app.

Fillers such as the boar story aren't necessary. There wasn't anything about that which affected his character, and nothing that happened that dramatically changed him. Filler is another cop-out, and doesn't look very good in your writing.

While the ANBU may not have been that selective, there was no way that they would make a Genin an ANBU member. Naruto stopped Pain, but he wouldn't have been accepted into the ANBU.

The weapon history is a brief summary, focusing on one point. The history is where you flesh that out.

JUTSU:

Connection 1 is very much similar to the already-canon Wind Blade technique, which was a by-default A-Rank Jutsu. Considering it can 'cut through most metals', there is no way that it would be classified as any less. Make it an A-Rank.

Connection 2 is unnecessary because of Connection 1's power. It is already an incredibly powerful technique if it can cut through most metals, you really don't need the boost in power, which at this point would have to be an S-Rank, but Jonin cannot have too many S-Rank techniques, and I doubt you'd want to keep this in place of something else.

Blazing Touch would make sense that way, however: in order for it to stay as B-Rank, you'll have to decrease the 'cutting potential' of the ability. Considering that its main focus is to 'numb' a part of the body, it doesn't have to have the same cutting power as the other techniques.

Everything else seems fine, but since it may need more clarification:

Sudden Oblivion is god-modding because it's a continuous combo. Like I said in the previous post, Taijutsu/Kenjutsu techniques aren't full-length onslaughts, they are simple, powerful blows that work best when used together. A technique like this, with the way that it is worded, sounds completely unavoidable and completely uncancel-able. You can picture it like this - since this would all presumably happen in the same post, it's too much for one character to do in a single move.

And another thing, I am not 'forgetting' about his hidden blades. They wouldn't truly be powerful enough to use alone for these techniques, though.

If you're trying to tell me that Fear Cosmic Slash is possible without a strength or chakra enhancement, then I don't know what to tell you. Remove it, explain it, or replace it.

Once again, Qual is god-modding because it is a 'barrage of kicks that are brutal'. But it's not just a rapid flurry of kicks - that would be fine - but it's a combination of precise, refined kicks. This also explains exactly how the opponent would react to the technique, but there is no way to determine how they would take the damage it deals or how they could/would negate it. This isn't like a videogame, there aren't long-strings of 'ultimate attacks' which just happen continuously when they're used.

High-Rate bullets is even more like god-modding. What is it, about 5-6 normal, precise attacks combined with 25 additional kicks? I'll repeat myself as much as I have to - Taijutsu are not long strings of combos. They are separate techniques which would be combined into a combo. No Taijutsu should guarantee you an instant-combo in a single post. Especially with 20+ blows.

" Again, I don't see how god-modding when you're grabbing your opponent by the face, smashes it on the ground, and punching the chest. " ... You're kidding, right? Just the fact that you're grabbing an enemies face, most likely without giving them a chance to react, is god-modding in and of itself, regardless of whether or not you follow it up with any attacks.

To avoid a massive super big argument, I will drop the topic of Chakra on Taijutsu.

Yes, you can build combos off of certain taijutsu techniques. But not a single combo in a single technique. Lion's Barrage and Uzumaki Barrage, to a lesser extent, are the worst possible examples as they aren't actually techniques. Sasuke copied what he 'thought' Rock Lee was going to do, and built off of it. He never used it again, because it wasn't a technique in and of itself. He probably wouldn't be able to preform it exactly the same another time. It may be listed on Narutopedia as a technique, but it inherently isn't. The same with Naruto, although it was more like a Ninjutsu since it utilized actual Shadow Clones.

I understand your need for detail, but you can be as detailed as you want in posts and all that.

Also, there's another problem that's come up now - you've got a lot of S-Rank stuff. You're going to have to cut back on it somehow. I don't necessarily care how, but you'll only be allowed a maximum of 2 S-Rank add-ons. Your weapon counts as one.

7Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Wed Sep 18, 2013 9:44 pm

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

I'll give Katana of Injustice to Aigo but put in the different elements. I'll let Wei keep Reshum No.

There is no way Connection 1 is similar to Sword of Wind in anyway possible. Considering it can "slice through most substances except metal and diamond" I'm sorry but A-rank is way out of the question. I'll keep it as it is as either C-rank or B-rank at the most.

This is where Connection 2 is necessary because of the low power of Connection 1, seeing that Connection 2 is S-rank, you just gave me a boost in ranking. I'll put this as S-rank for Connection 2 can cut through most metals.

Blazing Touch, I'll take out the Cutting Potential and put in the Piercing Potential in that case, seeing as that it was Lightning Release is mainly all about when it comes to weapon terms.

Now about the rest of the stuff:

Whoever said that you cannot block the second strike or even the first strike that'll break the strings of attacks? It all depends on how you word it. There are ways of canceling out strings, I've done so beforehand. The techniques are only god-modding in your eyes because you see it as the attacks are continuous without reaction with succession. Not entirely. Probably from the wording of the technique, you may think it's god-modding but whoever said that all of those hits are going to connect? Even a simple taijutsu move, like Dragon Tail, can be avoided.

If I said in all of those Taijutsu/Kenjutsu techs that the hits are in succession, then it would be god-modding. I'm saying if this connects, then this happens. What happens if the first hit does not connect? It breaks the entire technique itself. Just depends on how you word your reaction.

Since the long strings are out the way, for the S-rank stuff, I'm counting three: Reshum No, Connection 2 and Chains of Gleipnir x1.

I'll have all of these edited in no time. Thank you once again Tsugeki.

8Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 12:06 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

You may move the weapons around however you like. Reshum No it is, then.

Aigo wrote:There is no way Connection 1 is similar to Sword of Wind in anyway possible.
Wind Blade is a technique that infuses Chakra with the air to make a 'blade' of wind.

Your technique is a technique that infuses Chakra with the air to make a 'blade' of wind.

If anything, your technique is actually even more powerful, as you have more control over the blade than with the normal Wind Blade technique. Make it an A-Rank.

Also, you do not get to decide what is 'out of the question'. If another moderator or admin wants you to keep it at a B-C rank, they can overrule me. But you cannot. I told you to make the edit twice now, edit it.

Aigo wrote:This is where Connection 2 is necessary because of the low power of Connection 1
Low power? It can 'cut through most metals'. That kind of 'power' is more than enough to cut through quite a few Doton techniques, and even human bone, with very little resistance.

There is no reason to give Connection 1 a power boost at all, it's just another excuse to give your characters a stronger ability which he doesn't need.

Aigo wrote:Whoever said that you cannot block the second strike or even the first strike that'll break the strings of attacks? It all depends on how you word it.
Wording is exactly why your techniques seem more like God-Modding than normal techs. This whole 'sheathing the blade quickly to deal damage' is moving faster than most ninja would be able to keep up with. Because of that, the chances of the techniques being simply hard-countered are very, very low. I am not saying that it can't be blocked, but I know that you're going to follow through with the entire technique in one post, which concerns me.

Please include in your techniques that they can be countered at any time.

Aigo wrote:
Since the long strings are out the way, for the S-rank stuff, I'm counting three: Reshum No, Connection 2 and Chains of Gleipnir x1.
For starters, I'm pretty sure I ranked more than one ability at S-Rank. Don't ignore my comments.

Secondly, you may only have 2 S-Rank abilities/Weapons. That's abilities and weapons combined - the Reshum No counts as one. You may only keep one other S-Rank Ability OR Weapon.

9Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 3:13 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

I'll take out Connection 2 and keep the chains.

Now, onward to the next one.

Tsugeki, I appluad your modding skills, truly I do. You are one of the best moderators that I have come across from. But... I have to decline what you said about Connection 1.


Wei wrote:"By concentrating chakra into the user's body and focusing the chakra inside into wind, the user can form green energy blades..."

Tsugeki Genshi wrote:Wind Blade is a technique that infuses Chakra with the air to make a 'blade' of wind.

Your technique is a technique that infuses Chakra with the air to make a 'blade' of wind.
...Stop. What you are implying and what I wrote myself are totally two different things all together. How did you get "concentrating chakra inside the user's body and focusing that exact chakra into wind-natured chakra" similar to Sword of Wind's description? Two different descriptions. No where in Connection 1 does it says anything about my technique infusing chakra with the air when the chakra is concentrated inside the user's very own body to make a 'blade' of wind. I apologize, but that clearly did not make sense whatsoever.


Tsugeki Genshi wrote:Wording is exactly why your techniques seem more like God-Modding than normal techs. This whole 'sheathing the blade quickly to deal damage' is moving faster than most ninja would be able to keep up with. Because of that, the chances of the techniques being simply hard-countered are very, very low. I am not saying that it can't be blocked, but I know that you're going to follow through with the entire technique in one post, which concerns me.

Please include in your techniques that they can be countered at any time.
My apologies for getting into too much detail on how I calculate my strikes that you assumed by my writing, without asking, that all of my strikes connects with succession without reaction.

See, with my Taijutsu/Kenjutsu, I don't follow through the entire technique with just one post. I always go by 'if'. If this kick connects, initiate the other kick. If this kick does not connect, try a different Taijutsu technique.

With the sentence that's bold, I'm sorry, but I cannot follow through with that.

As I said before, I'm keeping the weapon. I'll take out Connection 2.

I will finish editing my application to make sure that everything is in tip-top shape. My apologies if I came off with the wrong expression or reaction.

10Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 4:19 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

Aigo wrote:But... I have to decline what you said about Connection 1.
Aigo. This is your final warning. If you refuse to edit what is asked, I'll out-right deny the character.

Aigo wrote:I apologize, but that clearly did not make sense whatsoever.
Wind Blade uses the user's chakra to make an ethereal blade, which is just as effective as a real blade. What your technique does is use chakra to make a blade that is not only similar to a real blade, but can also cut through metal. It is literally the same thing. You're trying to tell me that your technique is 'completely different' just because you didn't word it the same way as Wind Blade is, and that doesn't check out.

But I know that you're not going to accept it, because you seem to have the mindset that you're correct no matter what, but take a look at this:

Wei's Jutsu wrote:By concentrating chakra into the user's body and focusing the chakra inside into wind, the user can form green energy blades that can slice through most substances except metal and diamond. The chakra flows upon the user's arms and forms green energy blades from the fingertips, stretching to at least 5 feet at the smallest and 7 feet at the highest. The blades are flexible. The green blades follow his movements and stretches in all directions. The chakra forms around the user's arms takes on the appearance of wind blades, a long string of wind chakra. Wei can also use the green energy blades and insert them into the actual blade of their swords, increasing the sharpness of the blades. The technique is designed to use the human body as a sword itself, or focus it on the sword to make it seem as if there are two blades to one sword.
Broken down:

- You form chakra into a 'blade' in the wind.
- Not only that, but you make more than one blade.
- The blades can cut through almost all metals, with little exception.
- The blades are incredibly long, at 5-7 feet.
- The blades are flexible, meaning you can attack at basically any angle.
- The technique can be used on an actual blade to increase it's 'Sharpness', even though I've already explained that 'sharpness' does NOT equal cutting power.

Now, lets take a look at this:

Narutopedia's Explanation for Blade of Wind wrote:This technique is a pinpoint slashing strike, where the user emits chakra from their fingertips and materialises it into an near invisible weapon that assaults the enemy in a gust of wind. If the Sickle Weasel Technique can be regarded as a swarm of wind kunai, then this technique is akin to an unavoidable longsword which can leave the target's body mutilated. Just being in close proximity to the technique can cause minor cuts. The wind blades can be created and thrown, like projectiles, in rapid succession.
- The user emits chakra in the form of an invisible blade in the wind
- Being near the gust can cause cuts
- Wind Blades can be thrown in rapid succession.

Breaking both of these techniques down, we can see that your technique is actually more powerful than the already A-Rank technique.

In essence? They are the same thing. You're exerting chakra to make a metaphysical blade in the air, except that your technique is long-term, most likely short to mid range, and has a variety of other abilities.

This is not a C-Rank technique. Act as stubborn as you want, but that will not change. Fix it, or it will be removed.

Aigo wrote:My apologies for getting into too much detail on how I calculate my strikes that you assumed by my writing, without asking, that all of my strikes connects with succession without reaction.
I told you to drop the attitude. You're walking a very thin line now - this is not a debate topic, this is a review. If you don't want to edit your character, don't post him here.

As well, the way that your techniques are written do not imply that there is any sort of opening for an enemy to react to. It's a conglomeration of attacks that you threw together just to have powerful taijutsu/kenjutsu. For example:

Aigo wrote:where he strikes so fast that the opponent does not realize they have been slain until he sheathes his sword.
I know exactly what you're saying with this. I know you want your character to be exactly like Virgil, with the invisible/untraceable slashes and the incredibly impossible speed.

On top of this, you detail exactly how the enemy is 'supposed' to react to these techniques.

Aigo wrote: If this kick connects, initiate the other kick. If this kick does not connect, try a different Taijutsu technique.
It is not a Taijutsu at that point, though.

Like I said, a Taijutsu is normally a single, powerful blow or a flurry of rapid blows, which are not premeditated and do not have preset targets.

'If this kick connects, initiate the other kick' is moving from ONE taijutsu move into ANOTHER.

Want an example? Look at Rock Lee, again:

Leaf Whirlwind -> Shadow of the Dancing Leaf -> Rapid Kicking -> Spiral Lotus

He does not execute every single move in ONE technique, it's a mixture of different techniques. What you're doing right now is, technically, avoiding making tons of different Taijutsu by putting them all in ONE Taijutsu, which can be looked upon as cheating.

Aigo wrote: I'm sorry, but I cannot follow through with that.
Once again, it is not up to you at this point. If another staff member wants it to be changed back, they will say so.

Aigo wrote:As I said before, I'm keeping the weapon. I'll take out Connection 2.
You ignored my comment on the other S-Ranks.

11Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 4:45 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

I'll edit it, even the Connection 1 cannot cut through metal at all or even be thrown around like projectiles.


Tsugeki Genshi wrote:On top of this, you detail exactly how the enemy is 'supposed' to react to these techniques.
 Of course if you hit them in the right place with enough force and hopes it hits without them dodging, they are going to react in that manner. Not power-playing or god-modding.


Tsugeki Genshi wrote:He does not execute every single move in ONE technique, it's a mixture of different techniques. What you're doing right now is, technically, avoiding making tons of different Taijutsu by putting them all in ONE Taijutsu, which can be looked upon as cheating.
A knee strike is a different Taijutsu? Or a roundhouse kick is a different Taijutsu? Anyone can do that. Most people cannot even do what Rock Lee does, except Might Guy, that's why it is used as a separate technique. I'm issuing Taijutsu to where a lot of people can do, given their style of Taijutsu, just putting the exact movements in one technique. I really don't see how that is cheating. But, I will add the additional Taijutsu and get your take on them.

But, I will edit my jutsu and take out the ones that needed to be taken out.


Tsugeki Genshi wrote:You ignored my comment on the other S-Ranks.
My apologies for ignoring. I will take out Connection 2 as I already did with Katana of Injustice. Fear Cosmic Slice will be gone as well. But, looking at your first two posts, the rest were either bumped to A-rank or needed to drop a rank or increase a rank with a sustained chakra loss. Those were the only S-ranks I seen from this thread.


Tsugeki Genshi wrote:[quote"Aigo"]where he strikes so fast that the opponent does not realize they have been slain until he sheathes his sword.
I know exactly what you're saying with this. I know you want your character to be exactly like Virgil, with the invisible/untraceable slashes and the incredibly impossible speed.[/quote]
I can actually put that to a limit. But, Iaidojutsu usually ends like that without being like Vergil.

"The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn. " Given from the Narutopedia site in that category.

But, what I meant by that quote is that after he does the attack, he immediately resheathes his blade afterwards. Meaning he moves at high speeds to cut the opponent, then immediately resheathes his blade afterwards. My apologies for making it sound like that.

12Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 5:00 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

Aigo wrote:A knee strike is a different Taijutsu? Or a roundhouse kick is a different Taijutsu? Anyone can do that.
Dynamic Entry is just a kick to the head. Leaf Gale is just a sweeping kick.

There are hundreds of shinobi who could preform the techniques that Rock Lee did, they weren't so far-fetched as to not be copied.

Aigo wrote: Those were the only S-ranks I seen from this thread
As long as you address them.

Aigo wrote:"The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn. "
That isn't the same as being 'you are already dead' super!fast. Iaidojutsu is drawing the sword from the scabbard as its own attack, not drawing it to unleash a flurry of slashes and then sheathing it to stop them.

Aigo wrote:Meaning he moves at high speeds to cut the opponent, then immediately resheathes his blade afterwards.
That is, still, not the same as Iaidojutsu. The speeds that he'd have to be at in order to pull this off are incredible, and not what we've seen from most Joinin in the Naruto universe.

13Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Thu Sep 19, 2013 5:15 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

Tsugeki Genshi wrote:That is, still, not the same as Iaidojutsu. The speeds that he'd have to be at in order to pull this off are incredible, and not what we've seen from most Joinin in the Naruto universe.
You can use Chakra Flow to enhance the user, increasing his speed. Or you can have a clan that has a Special Characteristic to which their speed is above the average shinobi of their rank or lower.


But I will have everything edited.

14Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Fri Sep 20, 2013 4:53 am

Wei

Wei
Kiri Genin
Kiri Genin

Completed. Sorry for the mishap again Tsugeki.

15Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Fri Sep 20, 2013 6:43 am

Tsugeki Genshi

Tsugeki Genshi

Welp, that's basically all I saw that needed editing.

1/2.

16Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Fri Sep 20, 2013 6:46 am

Katsuro

Katsuro

I'll take a look in an hour or so to vote on it unless someone beats me to it.

17Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Sat Sep 21, 2013 8:49 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

I'm fine with that.

18Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Sat Sep 21, 2013 11:14 pm

Katsuro

Katsuro

Wei obtains the ability of being physically strong enough to break a mountain
Eh?

writing; claimed that French
Sorry Foreign languages don't belong in Naruto. Sowwy.

This sword possess the ability to extend a field of nature chakra when unsheathed, meant to suppress and repel chakra (Up to ten meters around the blade). Being that this weapon is sentient, it does not suppress its wielder's chakra when this ability is active. This ability can only be done once every 10 posts.
What do you mean by suppress and repel chakra? If someone were to throw a fireball at you, would you be able to destroy it and/or repel it? What about if someone attacked would you be able to dispel the chakra inside their body or even repel them backwards?

I would prefer it if you separated your jutsu with each element gettings and specialty getting their own spoiler wind ninjutsu would have its own, taijutsu would have its own, etc etc.

19Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Sun Sep 22, 2013 9:26 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

Katsuro wrote:Eh?
Chakra Enhanced Strength. I have it reserved for Wei.



Katsuro wrote:Sorry Foreign languages don't belong in Naruto. Sowwy.
I understand that. Just stating the he likes writing. I didn't know that I had to delete the language.




Katsuro wrote:What do you mean by suppress and repel chakra? If someone were to throw a fireball at you, would you be able to destroy it and/or repel it? What about if someone attacked would you be able to dispel the chakra inside their body or even repel them backwards?
Like I told Tsugeki, "How does it supress chakra? Simple, it crushes the chakra of those that are not the Morningstar, Uzumaki, or the Senju clan by rank. Since the sword itself is S-rank, if the user is not of the Morningstar clan, you can say it slowly drains away the chakra of those that tries to wield the sword itself. The sword itself was made from a special metal and had a seal put on it by the Uzumaki clan to grant that ability. Repelling chakra... it forces the chakra of the non-Morningstar, Uzumaki, or Senju clansmen away from the sword. You have to cancel one to do the other, for both cannot be used at the same time." For the jutsu, it most likely repels the jutsu depending on the rank of the jutsu of the jutsu and the sword. 

JUTSU REPELLENT:

S-rank: Once per battle
A-rank: Twice per battle
B-rank: Three times per battle
C-rank: Four times per battle
D-rank: Five times per battle

It does not destroy the jutsu, for that would be wrong in so many ways. Unless the sword was above S-rank, which possibly not.

If someone attacked me, it would not repel or disperse their chakra. It only does that when the opponent tries to even wield the sword.

Edited.

20Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Sun Sep 22, 2013 2:16 pm

Sketh Matamune

Sketh Matamune
Kiri Anbu Captain
Kiri Anbu Captain

So, I was just promoted to Mod.

Aigo wrote:
Chakra Enhanced Strength. I have it reserved for Wei.
I hope you were exaggerating when you said mountain....

Chakra enhanced strength has enough ass behind it to kill someone in one punch if they are hit by it, this is true enough and even stated in canon (unless you're up against someone like Orochimaru who can tank several of them to no effect). But no one - not even the canons - has demonstrated the strength to bust mountains apart with it.

Tsunade has, at most, broken susanno ribcage's, which is an amazing feat by itself in terms of raw power, but even that took two direct hits at the most. Reword it and take out the mountain busting part. Causing craters several meters wide is canon for just about all the users (all two of them anyway....), but utterly shattering a mountain isn't.

21Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Sun Sep 22, 2013 2:24 pm

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

Edited.

22Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Mon Sep 23, 2013 12:40 am

Katsuro

Katsuro

Add this to your weapon

JUTSU REPELLENT:

S-rank: Once per battle
A-rank: Twice per battle
B-rank: Three times per battle
C-rank: Four times per battle
D-rank: Five times per battle

It'll be easier to find if its apart of the sheet instead of somewhere in the posts.

23Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Mon Sep 23, 2013 1:35 am

Wei

Wei
Kiri Genin
Kiri Genin

Added.

24Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Wed Sep 25, 2013 4:44 am

Aigo

Aigo
Hokage
Hokage

Bump

25Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Empty Re: Wei Zhun -> Genin - Kirigakure Wed Sep 25, 2013 4:58 am

Katsuro

Katsuro

2/2

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